Friday 7 September 2018

Narritive


 My Narritive

 Fortine

James was watching the speedway, his Blond spiky hair was flying everywhere and mud was all over his Large Adidas clothes and he looked brown from the mud going all over his pale skin. His sister Lauren was nowhere to be seen so he went down to the trees to take a leak because the toilets at the speedway were disgusting! When James got down to the trees he started to pee and then he found out that he was peeing on a bunch of red strawberry smelling flowers so James turned around and starts to pee the other way but the wind was coming that way so the pee went all over his clothes, so James had to stop peeing and go more into the trees so he could finish off his business, when he got back to the speedway he saw his sister Lauren with her Nike clothes on and they also were covered in mud just like his clothes but they were small not large, instead of Blonde spiky hair Lauren had Black long silky hair. ZOOM ZOOM ZOOM mud flying in Laurens and James’s faces and then we heard there mum yelling from the car “Where’s my phone” James looked at his pocket and said nothing and Lauren was not listening because she was watching Dad race and then they heard BOOM CRASH and they heard and saw a car roll James and Lauren looked at what number it was and then mum heard Lauren and James scream “AAAARRRRGGGGHHHH”. James and Lauren were waiting at home while mum was at the Hospital waiting for dad's results from Dr Macshift, mum had to get the next door neighbor to let James stay with them, James’s friend lived there who is called Kyle he has been James’s friend for two months now. Lauren stayed at her friend Chloes house down the road. 2 months later James woke up in a mysterious looking room and all he remembered was that his dad was dead and shortly after his mum died of cancer, he also remembered that he was staying at a children's home and Kyle visited him and put a needle in his arm. When James actually looked around he saw Kyle sitting in an armchair, James said “Where am I and where is Lauren” Kyle looked surprised that James was awake and then he said “Welcome to Fortine James”. 120 days later James was on a mission and trying to take down a gang that killed for fun, James did a uppercut and then a really hard right kick in the face. James had just taken down a killing gang and they were in prison. James was sweating and the bag over James made him itch finally when Kyle pulled the bag over him he was outside in the beautiful garden with peppermint smelling grass, yellow sunflowers and a bench. When James actually looked at the bench though he saw a teenage girl with black silky hair, James’s jaw fell open and the person sitting on the bench was his little sister Lauren. James was back in his room and was thinking about his mum and also was thinking of how much he has changed, James looked in the mirror and looked how much he changed he was not flabby but instead James had ab’s he also was tan and had enormous muscles on his legs and arms, he also saw how tan he was. James said “This is my new home and I will never leave”. Know that my story is done, go write your own story, it can be about anything you want. THE END

1 comment:

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